My first instinct is to change your tagline immediately. Ugly duckling nerd is A. Not true and B. Sounds like you lack confidence. Here are some suggestions:
Successful entrepreneur looking for fun and driven girl (let’s be honest, girls like a successful guy)
Fun loving, intelligent gent looking for fun-seeking, savvy woman
I am sure you can get more creative but those are some thoughts.
Frankly, after reading the rest of the profile, I am having a hard time seeing anything I would change. I think it is so lovely and honest sounding, and paints you as a wonderful down-to-earth guy. I would love to see what others suggest, but in my mind all you need to do is change the tagline and the emails will start flooding your inbox.
My response to Rachel
stayed away from touting the “successful” stuff… don’t want to flaunt things.
Her follow on response
I understand why, but you can do it without being egotistical and without attracting the wrong person (although I imagine you’d like intelligence and drive just like you would offer.) I don’t think it is flaunting at all. It is saying, I have accomplished a lot and I expect the same. To me, intelligence, business savvy, an entrepreneurial spirit and the know-how to accomplish big things are sexy attributes.
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